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"Panta Rei"

Murmuring water opened up to visions of pink orchirds. That was the place.

The bodies sustained by the most powerful engineered natural wonders of Earth arrived. Zig zag  was the movement that affected the air.

Rippling waves vibrated and guided those minuscule antennae. The eyes were piercing the horizon. Arriving too late could have meant to die.

It was time for the harvest, the moment of the Transformation. Thousands of them were flying together by days. The sunset was close. Their compact mass was a translucent cloud in constant movement . You would have said it was almost oscuring the 3 white moons high on the left. The moment was close.

The tiny bodies shifted and curved, bent and touched each other, liquidly exchanging thousands of fluids, the sweat, the tears, the sperm, the juices, the salivas....the infinitesimale celebration was ready for creating the new generation.

Telepatically talking, thousands and thousand of tiny brains clicked.

The liquid, silver, vibrating mass imploded.

And the new creature was born, made of all the thousands that were arrievd from any corner of the land. From the East, from the West, from the South, from the North.

She would have lived until the next 3 full moons would have appeared in the sky. And then she would have again mutate herself and again and again.

Panta Rei, says Eraclito.

Even a dragonfly doesn't fly in the same sky with the same wings.

Everything changes....



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  • waterstar said on Feb 14, 2007....

    melodic description Ginger, reads like poetry

    although I had to read it twice to get the full picture in my mind - Panta Rei is a foreign concept to me -

    ok - just looked it up - it means everything flows or everything changes

    good work Ginger - I liked it alot!

  • VICARIOUS said on Feb 14, 2007....
    Keep in mind I'm not into Psy-Fi--at all, so this is a supreme compliment.
     
    This was positively riviting. I was looking forward to the next sentence. You have a very nice and impressive style, which screams from the start. I'd read this even if this isn't my genre. The writing is what keeps me.
  • mom said on Feb 14, 2007....
    very scifi and poetic,  I like it very much
  • Lucytorial said on Feb 14, 2007....
    Another SC that should be published.... I want more please????
  • silverwhisper said on Feb 16, 2007....
    your narrative reminds me in some ways of a river: flowing freely, unpredictably, unstoppably. it's so very fitting.

    i don't believe i have any criticisms of significance, GS.

    ed
  • beyondtheveil said on Feb 16, 2007....
    I do like sci-fi and loved it.
  • gingersoul said on Feb 16, 2007....

    Thank to you all.....very much...i appreciated you took the time and pointed what you liked about it...

    Funny...because i dont like sci-fi that much.........lol...

    i read a lot of it when i was young though and i read my daughter's books with fiction-fantasy stories....but its not my first choice of reading and writing....

     

  • husbandhater said on Feb 16, 2007....
    Different but I like it. Sooo descriptive!
    Gin you've got a way with words.
  • gingersoul said on Feb 17, 2007....

    HHater....thank you.....i am glad you like it...;-)

    I feel so frustrated though because of my natural limitation with the English words........i think: if they only could read me in my language.....but i try to do my best ..... 

  • Zayda said on Feb 18, 2007....
    GS-- I love the flow of this. It's airy and meandering yet part of it zip, rather like what you are describing.  I hope that makes sense.

    The only suggestion I would make is in the sentence where you use "you"--"You could almost say...".  I would re-write that one sentence to remove the pronoun "you" simply because it's your only use of it, and I think it pulls that sentence out of rhythm from the rest of the writing.
  • gingersoul said on Feb 18, 2007....
    Zayda.....i see what you mean.....it does unbalance the rhythm.......thank you for your suggestion.......
  • Zayda said on Feb 18, 2007....
    I love this line, btw:

    The tiny bodies shifted and curved, bent and touched each other, liquidly exchanging thousands of fluids, the sweat, the tears, the sperm, the juices, the salivas....the infinitesimale celebration was ready for creating the new generation.

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