This is my entry for silverwhisper's writing exercise about description.
Gripped by the full moon, he panicked. Pain was already spreading through his joints. He wanted to hide, but it was not meant to be. A piercing cry escaped his lips as he fell to the ground. His body wretched. Fangs. Claws. Fur. No sense of who he was. He needed to feed.
CW
CreativeWoman posted on Feb 13, 2007
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mom said on Feb 14, 2007....
very good that was awesome -
CreativeWoman said on Feb 14, 2007....
mom,
Thanks.
CW
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polarheart said on Feb 14, 2007....
i could "feel" the a character's anxiety - good play on words -
MissMimi said on Feb 14, 2007....
Nicely done, CW. I'd love to read more about the transformation from man to monster. Hope you'll write more. :) -
CreativeWoman said on Feb 14, 2007....
polar,
Thanks. I'm glad you liked it.
Mimi,
Thank you. Sometimes I forget how much I like to write fiction. :-)
CW
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silverwhisper said on Feb 14, 2007....
CW, i like the terseness! the shorter sentence structures do a nice job i think of showing the mood of the narrator. indeed, i like that so much that i think slightly different word choices that allow greater economy of phrasing would make this even stronger.
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CreativeWoman said on Feb 14, 2007....
Thank you, ed. Maybe I'll flesh it out into some sort of short story. I'll kept that in mind.
CW
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CreativeWoman said on Feb 14, 2007....
mom,
Thank you. (Sorry that I missed you when I commented earlier.)
CW
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VICARIOUS said on Feb 14, 2007....
This was very good. I think you got this writing thing down. -
CreativeWoman said on Feb 14, 2007....
Vic,
Thank you. I appreciate your compliment.
CW
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midnightman said on Feb 16, 2007....
Very good CW--I want to read more!MM -
Zayda said on Feb 18, 2007....
CW--I really loved this. You did so much with so few words. I think the terseness, as Silver pointed out, really helped drive home the anguish/pain of his transformation from man to beast. Well, done, as always. -
CreativeWoman said on Feb 19, 2007....
midnight,
Thank you.
Zayda,
I'm glad you liked it. It was fun to write.
CW
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