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The echoed crunch of his soft leather soles on the sand was magnified by the mist.  Today, he needed a good catch, there where too many mouths at home, and the thought of another light catch weighted heavy on his mind. 
 
He pushed his little boat into the water and started rowing towards a spot he hadn't been to since his father died.  He didn't want to go back, but he knew that the fish would be there.
 
He got his first net cast before the fog cleared and sat repairing the spare when something knocked the boat.  Literally, like a knock on the door.  Rap tap tap
 
He peared over the side of he boat.  Behind him he heard a giggle, and then a splash. 
 
"Alright, Misty, get in the boat, ya know its too cold for you to be out here this time of the day" 
 
But looking down in the water he saw her as she past under the boat again.  First a blanket of fawn colored hair, and then the tail, which looked black and seal like through the water.  His heart hit his throat as her head emerged from the water, much like he'd watched his daughter do many times before. 
 
"Well, Misty is a fine name to be sure, but it does not belong to me" She tease through tawny lips.  The playful tone of her voice brought his pulse down to a steady thump, thump bringing his focus from his surprise to her mouth.
 
She pressed her lips together before she smiled.  The crescent of her smile framed her nose like an oyster does a pearl, craddling it lovingly between two rounded checks. His attention moved to her eyes.  He was surprise to find that they were grey. For some reason he expected them to be blue, his surprise made him say the word out loud.
 
"It will turn blue again soon, and you'll have a fine feast tonight"
 
She dipped back under the tide before her hair had the chance to dry and was gone.
 


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  • Lucytorial said on Feb 13, 2007....
    Hello waterstar, - You are definately on same wavelength (same topic/creature). I like this a lot its descriptive....which was the idea!
  • CreativeWoman said on Feb 13, 2007....
    This is a mermaid. Right?  :-)

    Great story.

    CW
  • mom said on Feb 14, 2007....
    Good story,  very nice
  • MissMimi said on Feb 14, 2007....
    You set the mood perfectly. I love the teasing quality of the mermaid. This makes me smile. I'm glad you posted it. Good job, waterstar!
  • polarheart said on Feb 14, 2007....
    lovely description. . .I was just a bit lost as to who "Misty" was?
  • waterstar said on Feb 14, 2007....
    thanks guys for the compliments - I think next time, I'm going to take more time to craft my writing better. 
  • Dicconzane said on Feb 14, 2007....
    Agre with polar on th Misty thing. That aside though there was some lovely description. Enjoyed, 'The crescent of her smile framed her nose like an oyster does a pearl, craddling it lovingly between two rounded checks.'
  • husbandhater said on Feb 14, 2007....
    Different but nice. I like it.
  • waterstar said on Feb 14, 2007....
    yeah, I guess it was more of a story than a description - hence the "Misty" thing - that was a good question - leading you into the rest of the story -
  • waterstar said on Feb 14, 2007....
    I think thats what I was doing
  • silverwhisper said on Feb 14, 2007....
    i will comment in detail later when time permits but i didn't want you thinking i was ignoring it. :>

    ed
  • beyondtheveil said on Feb 14, 2007....
    I'm so glad you wrote this post. I love mermaids, always have. They are so rarely mentioned I sometimes wonder if people have forgotten about them.
  • gingersoul said on Feb 14, 2007....

    Beyond...i have to confess it...i am a mermaid.....

    but shhh, dont say to anyone...;-)

    They have alwasy been my favorite mythological creatures.....Ulysses had to tie himself to the mast to resist to them....they are wonderous creature....

    Water..i like your concept very much...good job........ 

  • Lioness said on Feb 14, 2007....
    I like the description of the mermaid.. I am just wondering, was it nightime or daytime when he saw the creature?
  • waterstar said on Feb 14, 2007....
    good question, Lioness, it was morning
  • Lioness said on Feb 14, 2007....
    ohhh.. thanks waterstar. I initially assumed it was midnight, or at night. hehe..
  • Zayda said on Feb 18, 2007....
    Waterstar--I like the concept behind this and the description of the mermaid, but I'm a bit confused as to who "Misty" is since that's not the name of the Mermaid.
  • waterstar said on Feb 18, 2007....
    you weren't the only one Zayda, Misty is the name of his daughter -

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