this blog entry contains sexual content. if you are offended by such things, hit the back button now: you'll be happier. this is the beginning of a new series.
we have danced this dance before, you and i: just never w/ each other.
the fighting, the inevitable betrayal, the frenzied, ecstatic making up—ours is a tempestuous relationship, isn’t it? and yet, for all that, for as well as we know each other—as a cobra and mongoose might—never once did i strike upon the reason why you always strayed.
until now.
now i see that it is b/c of your independence—your need never to be possessed. and if you simply told me that this was at the heart of the matter, i would have understood.
or at least, so i’d like to think, anyway. but now you have crossed the line that never should have been crossed.
had you betrayed me w/ any of your previous lovers—i could forgive that. indeed, i could have enjoyed that with the two of you. but to seduce angelo, my blood brother…ah, now that requires a very special kind of punishment. and while i certainly deserved some measure of revenge for having been with your friend kate, you should know not strike at me in this way. not with him.
no, cara mia, you certainly should have known better than that.
so now, i await you in our room, as the fading afternoon light falters on the bedspread. i have set the stage w/ consummate precision and attention to detail, you see.
i hear your light footfalls in the foyer. you call to me sweetly—as if i did not know another man’s seed is running down your thigh even as my name is on your lips. i smile to myself, thinking of the shape of my revenge.
“in the bedroom,” i call. i know that you desire to tell me of what happened while i was away: how you whiled away the hours in his embrace. yes, yes…this is always a part of the game we play. and i am curious to know if you will tell me the truth.
i do not look up as you enter the room but i am aware of your presence from the tick-tack!sound of your heels against the hardwood floor. well, that and your musk, which the draft cannot help but bring to me.
now i look up. “so…who was it this time,” i ask idly.
you surprise me. “ah…you already know?”
i nod gravely. “did you think i wouldn’t know? did you think he wouldn’t tell me?”
your expression is direct, matter-of-fact and faintly sad. “if it had been anyone other than kate, i could have forgiven that.”
“you and kate were never as close as angelo and i are. this was a most unpleasant surprise.”
you demand impatiently, “what’s the difference? honestly, one friend for another friend—”
“—no. not one friend for another friend. one blood brother for a friend. you know angelo is my blood brother. you and kate are friends, but you’ve never been as close as that—nothing near it. and you know it, cara mia. and for this, for this singular act of betrayal…well, this calls for a punishment.”
this is when you see the microphone and the camcorder. your eyes widen appreciatively. “carlo, no—i have never—”
“i know you haven’t, but now you will,” i say simply. “you have done something truly extraordinary and there must be a truly extraordinary consequence.”
you look upon the rich umber sheets w/ something akin to terror. “carlo, i will not submit.”
“ah, cara mia, that is where you are mistaken. i may be hurt, but i will never push you to do something terrible. i will record what happens but this is your camcorder and what it records will belong to you alone to do w/ as you like. but i think you will enjoy this—a great deal, in fact.”
your head is bowed, your luxurious hair a perfect match for the sheets. when you look up, i can see that the fear has melted away, revealing a confident, lascivious smile. “then yes, i will submit, carlo.”
“then here is how you shall submit. you will not move a muscle or speak. you are to remain still. if you speak or move, this ends. and you definitely do not want that.”
i walk forward and pull your skirt up over your hips, the better to drink in the sight of your nakedness and savor your arousal.
you are…still.
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silverwhisper posted on Dec 27, 2006
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MissMimi said on Dec 27, 2006....
Ed, honey, I'm sure you know this, but you are a tease. My imagination is going wild. Hurry please. -
silverwhisper said on Dec 27, 2006....
ah, mimi...you have no idea just how much of a tease i truly am...but thank you! :>
does the distinction that carlo is drawing make sense to you, though? b/n the woman and her friendship w/ kate, vs. his and his friendship w/ angelo?
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MissMimi said on Dec 27, 2006....
Well, I thought you made it clear that the friendship between the two women was not as close as the friendship between the men. I'm not sure what you mean by "blood brothers". Anyway, it made sense to me. There is a hierarchy of friendships, I do agree with that. But I just wonder why Carlo isn't pissed off at Angelo, or maybe he is, and we just haven't seen it yet? Personally I'd be just as angry with the friend as the lover. -
lioneljay said on Dec 27, 2006....
Good start, my friend. I'm axiously awaiting details on the punishment that I hope we'll get to witness. -
silverwhisper said on Dec 27, 2006....
mimi: mm, good point. there's a reason but i didn't include it. that will have to wait for chapter 2, then.
LJ: thank you, sir. :>
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secretlife said on Dec 27, 2006....
I love this one ed......i can't wait for the punishment.I find it believable that Carlo is more pissed at his cara mia than with his blood brother- i think especially in latin communities, the macho male would blame the woman. I felt his ire.The part I didn't care for so much is the negotiation for the submission. it makes her seem stronger.....the keeper of the upper hand even with HIM.I don't want him negotiating.I want him exacting revenge.Taking what's his...I dunno..more forceful.But ed, the story is hot. And I'm anticipating the punishment. -
tbs230 said on Dec 28, 2006....
I agree with SL, if he is angry, then the punishment should be more "unwanted" (can't think of a better phrase)...she seems to want it, and granted, she should not feel uncomfortable with anything, but it makes it seem more pleasurable than it should be...and umm, I'm very visual, so what does she look like? what does he look like?
Aside from that, I like it, I don't know how long I can stay still waiting for the next chapter.
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silverwhisper said on Dec 28, 2006....
SL: hm...i was worried about making carlo seem a bit too selfish or not concerned about having her consent, but perhaps that fear itself is a problem. thank you, as always.
tbs: heh...i generally leave aside character descriptions unless they're part of the narrative (e.g., her hair matching the umber sheets). i don't generally like to dwell on exposition to be honest, but perhaps i will describe them in chapter 2, on which incidentally i'm already at work. :>
thank you ladies. :>
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lioneljay said on Dec 28, 2006....
Ed, I think that you have a good balance of fear and consent in here. I read this as a first (or early) foray into some BDSM activities for this couple and in such cases it's vital that each party give consent - in particular the sub must give his or her consent. Once that consent has been granted, though, the dominant takes over and no doubt the result will be very entertaining for us. -
silverwhisper said on Dec 28, 2006....
LJ: as i consider you a mentor in all things BDSM, i particularly appreciate your insights on consent and its granting. thank you, sir. :>
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Zayda said on Dec 28, 2006....
Silver--I really like this; I like the way the anticipation builds.
Honestly, I love the fact that you don't dwell on describing your characters. I think that's what makes the pieces you write so great because it makes it much easier for the readers to picture the character any way he/she sees fit--in terms of physical description.
It's a great writing technique to leave out detailed physical description. Please don't vary away from that; it's one of the elements that makes your writing so strong.
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silverwhisper said on Jan 02, 2007....
thank you, super z. it isn't something i deliberately set out to do nor is it something i've really thought about, to be honest. :>
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queenparanoia said on Jan 02, 2007....
ok i'm now subscribing to you!!!great story. great characters. and i'm now wet. ready to do you know what.. -
silverwhisper said on Jan 02, 2007....
thank you, queen! glad you're enjoying it! :>
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00purple666 said on Jan 10, 2007....
OOH say....Moving to part 2.... -
silverwhisper said on Jan 10, 2007....
thank you, purple! :>
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ForgottenHeart said on Jan 12, 2007....
My fingers can't type this fast enough so I can read part two. You are a genius!
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silverwhisper said on Jan 12, 2007....
nah, i'm not a genius: just a guy w/ a very smutty mind. :>
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frontanack said on Mar 20, 2007....
i don't think of this as a smutty mind. I adhere to the inestiamble beauty of the love making process... reading your writings is giving me a measure to see how great the damages have been... just scars. I know guys like to compare their scars... it is a common game.\
but no, it takes clarity to see, to feel, to write like that. nice heat.
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silverwhisper said on Mar 21, 2007....
frontanack, thank you so much! i saw that you already wrote an exercise for last week that i haven't gotten to but i will try to do so shortly, promise!
ed
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