• queenparanoia said on Oct 27, 2009....

  who sang this?

• cuppajava said on Oct 27, 2009....

  curious ....interesting...but curious

• travelr712 said on Oct 27, 2009....

  nobody qpdoll, i wrote it.

• queenparanoia said on Oct 27, 2009....

  oh i see... it''s nice... :-)

• Hegemone said on Oct 27, 2009....

  Trav, that sounds like something that could be turned into a really awesome song.

• travelr712 said on Oct 27, 2009....

  thanks hege, i sorta have the tune in my head, i might just try developing it. course, the song's not finished yet, that's only 2 verses. i'd need a third.

• cuppajava said on Oct 27, 2009....

  maybe I can help you with the third ? but I need to know how dark you wanna make it,and what motivated this in the first place.Its got a lot to do with getting into a totally different headspace - if that makes sense?

• travelr712 said on Oct 27, 2009....

  perfect sense cj. what motivated it is that i had some words in my head and knew if i started writing, the rest would come. it took me @ 5 minutes to write. it's more about how the words scan the music, how they sound with the chords played than about any particular subject. i actually didn't have a meaning in mind, and don't really know what it means, and that's part of my goal, the obscurity of the lyrics are part of the attraction. then the listener can make it about whatever they want it to be about.

  did that answer your question?

• jebusiamnt665 said 10 days ago....

  I felt a lot of pain and secrets hidden within this piece. I keep re-reading and wondering if you're really trying to get something out of your system, but you're scared to do so.
  
  To me, it sounds like a cry for help. I don't know how else to interpret it.
  
  

  "can someone show me how

  to melt the pain away

  to live another day?"

  Pretty obvious. So I'm guessing if cuppajava wants to make the third verse, he could follow-through with that interpretation.
  
  Just a thought.
  

• travelr712 said 9 days ago....

  jeb, it does sound like a cry for help. i wanted it to sound 'gritty', hardcore, kwim? it just scanned the music in my head really well. it might be a theme for a third virse, but now i'm thinking maybe repeat part of the first. not sure, my son and law and i are going to work on it together.

• jebusiamnt665 said 9 days ago....

  Well, good luck :) hope I get to listen to it after you're done.
  

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