• DaddysLittleSlut said on Jul 14, 2009....

  mmm thank you.. what would you like to have done for you?

• seer said on Jul 14, 2009....

  Hmmm my vagina is not wet. Maybe its because I don't have a vagina.....

• exhibit_c said on Jul 14, 2009....

  Daddys: you tell me. If it involves sucking, it sounds good.

• secretlife said on Jul 14, 2009....

  nice to see you posting ex-c. 
  thank goodness you haven't changed!

• anonymous said on Jul 14, 2009....

  I'm melting!

• hottips4u said on Jul 15, 2009....

  Sounds like someone needs to learn how to fuck.
  
  That wasn't erotic, nor even written in form or ability to convey a sexual image of anything other than watching the nature channel and the mating of primates that displayed more experience than your attempting to.
  
  And, this is all about you/I.  In fact the first thing in each sentence is your reference to yourself as in "I".
  
  Didn't see any belly clinching orgasm in it for her, didn't see what you call fucking.  Its more like a teenager playing stink finger, hopping on, shoots his load and calls himself a stud because he was able to cum minus his own hands.
  
  If your going to write about sex, perhaps you should really experience it like a man instead of using your childhood memories and old penthouse articles to draw upon.
  
  Come on....write a real fuck me til I haven't the strength to stand up on trembling limbs and an immediate lack in ability to catch my breath due to back to back orgasms - still rocking through every fiber of my body long after a load of cum wasted the moment entirely by cumming in me instead on on me while I watched the head swell and spurt stream after stream of ivory beads being strung about my stomach and breast.
  
  What you wrote sounds like its more troulbling as a mess to clean up after, like two or three minutes of some afternoon delight that doesn't amount to even a mid day snack in reality.
  
  Get with it, except for the word fuck...you haven't written anything a 7th grader hasn't passed about in a note while in study hall.
  
  Learn to fuck first, then perhaps you can write something to moisten the peachy smooth lips of a woman. Until then the only thing all wet is your writing.
  
  [ I ] had to tell ya dude....that was lame & limpy lol
  
  
  
  
  

• uniquely-platonic said on Jul 15, 2009....

  Are you gay? Sounds that way!

• exhibit_c said on Jul 15, 2009....

  So far, two good reviews, and two bad.

• seer said on Jul 15, 2009....

  I would give it a positive review. If I were a woman I might have enjoyed this piece of erotic, which is well written and thought out, but as a hetrosexual male it doesn't get my blood flowing!

• exhibit_c said on Jul 17, 2009....

  HotTips: maybe you like this better.
  
  Awake in the night, ninety minutes after;
  The musky scent of sex still lingers in the bed.
  My body is sated and spent,
  And I am content in your presence.
  
  The Beast we made knew only the heat of our desire,
  And heard only our whispered endearments.
  Now the breeze from the window is cooler,
  And there is a distant rumble of trucks from the highway.
  
  The memory of our coupling does not arouse me,
  I will remain quiet in the afterglow of satisfaction
  Until rosy dawn and the noisy morning birds
  Call us to the challenges of the new day.
  
  
  

• CreativeWoman said on Jul 17, 2009....

  She must be a lucky woman.
  
  CW
  

• hottips4u said on Jul 17, 2009....

  Yep, that's erotic and real enough to send many images through one's mind.
  
  Glad to see your back to real writing once again.  You never were a slacker, and it pissed me off that you were disrespecting yourself with such other nonsense.
  
  Thanx, now I have loads of images flowing through my mind, and they are all comforting and nurturing these erotic moments sparked via a wisdom you've etched with your writing above.
  
  Glad I was able to reach you C.  Welcome back.
  

• sg138 said on Jul 17, 2009....

  not bad

• blueraven6 said on Jul 26, 2009....

  I agree. You went from hot to limp in two messages.

• exhibit_c said on Jul 27, 2009....

  My, my, everyone's a critic. 
  
  Different styles at different times for different reasons. Some work, some don't. Some work for a wide audience, some only for niche. None of it is meant to be commercial. I rarely write anything long enough to be commercial, unless maybe for an erotic greeting card company.
  

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