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The sun

Has set in its fixed position for

The night

 

The gentle breeze

Cools my exposed skin and clicks

Clicks and clicks…

As I make pictures in the clouds, a

Chicken…

Rabbit…

Horse…biting a goose

 

A lady

Holds a white purse in

Her white dress

 

She looks out my window

Why can’t I go? I think

She thinks

Wind, blow me to my

Destiny, take me where

I want to go. With my relatives, let me make friends

With the birds. I will spread my

Wings. Let go of this heavy purse and

 

Take off.

                                                                                                 

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  • travelr712 said on Apr 17, 2009....
    are you sky diving?
  • Edriisxe said on Apr 19, 2009....
    Ohh...that's a great guess!!! Seriously!!
     
    No. Sorry. Fail. Try again?
  • travelr712 said on Apr 19, 2009....
    you're taking pictures of clouds through your bedroom window at sunset?
  • Edriisxe said on Apr 19, 2009....
    You're getting warmer. =] Minus taking pictures. And there is no sunset.
  • travelr712 said on Apr 19, 2009....
    guess i don't know how the clicks fit in, i thought that must've been a camera. but it seems to me that you want to change places with the white cloud woman.
  • Edriisxe said on Apr 19, 2009....
    Nope. Not changing places with anyone. Ok, i'll help a little. It's a bit odd, but the clicks are the sounds a moving fan makes when it's turning...=]
     
    It's an observation poem.
  • travelr712 said on Apr 19, 2009....
    do you have a parakeet?
  • Edriisxe said on Apr 19, 2009....
    HA...oh dear God no. I did once. lol But that has nothing to do with the poem. Tell me when you give up or want a hint.
  • travelr712 said on Apr 19, 2009....
    ok, i give up!
  • Edriisxe said on Apr 19, 2009....
    Ha. I knew it. It's very hard. Its either because its not clear enough or its something no one would think of. I was lying on my bed and looking at the ceiling. You know the splotches on your ceiling? They reminded me of clouds. It was dark outside, so "the sun has set in its fixed position for the night."
     
    I saw all the animals and then finally saw the lady in white and a white purse. She was facing the direction of the window and I imagined that she wanted to fly into the sky.
     
    That was a long explanation, but I could but it could be in simpler words. =]
  • travelr712 said on Apr 19, 2009....
    you got me on that one, i never woulda guessed!
  • Edriisxe said on Apr 19, 2009....
    Mwahahahaha. T'was a good one, wasn't it?
  • travelr712 said on Apr 19, 2009....
    yes it was, good imagination, and good poem from it.
  • Edriisxe said on Apr 19, 2009....
    Thank you. Honestly, that came out of me in just a couple minutes in the middle of the night. But do you not write poems? You should try. I don't think I saw a tag saying you did. I wonder what you can do. =]
  • travelr712 said on Apr 19, 2009....
    sure, i've written allot of poems on my blog.
     
    the poem you wrote was truly deep
    to think twas just before you sleep
    the muse would play into your dream
    and flow unbridled it would seem
     
    with clicking fan and heavy purse
    you crafted carefully each verse
    the imagry obscure and fine
    we're glad to know it was beneign
     
    so thank you for your effort thus
    it is a kindness you do us
    to labor hard and follow through
    and share with all a glimpse of you
     
    :-)
  • Edriisxe said on Apr 19, 2009....
    Oh goodness. Wow...you just came up with that? Yes! Oh OH! Goodness, that was extremely...amazing! For me? Goodness. That touched my heart! =D
  • travelr712 said on Apr 19, 2009....
    yeah, while i was playing uno with queenparanoia. and you're welcome :-)
  • Edriisxe said on Apr 19, 2009....
    you're playing uno? I know the game...but...okay...
  • travelr712 said on Apr 19, 2009....
    well, the online version. we live on opposite sides of the earth. we're bored. it was something to do.
  • Edriisxe said on Apr 19, 2009....
    oh i see. Well, i had a rough day today and another early tomorrow. Goodnight and have fun. =]
  • travelr712 said on Apr 19, 2009....
    sorry you had a rough day, seems to be going around. goodnight to you too.

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