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i wanted to write a poem-
 
but damn it, the words just won't come out.
 
i wanted to say i've missed you-
that my days just aren't the same when you're not here to share them with me.
that i've missed the sound of your voice,
and the sound of your silence too.
 
but hell
the rhythm is off-
those words aren't at all poetic!
 
oh words?
yoohoo, words? 
come out come out wherever you are...
 
ok-
let me try again....
 
my darling:
without you here, nothing looks the same -
even the colors in my landscape are duller with you gone-
hurry back to me.
 
oh my god!
how hokey is that?
 
words?
where have you gone?
 
 
and why is it so hard for me to say that you've become a part of my world?
 


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  • gingersoul said on Jul 30, 2008....
    Secret......still....i like it!
    Love words can come out sappy and sugary and hokey and mushy and sometimes even don't come out right at all...

    But i know your feelings are all here....

    Wish you to reunite with him ASAP.......
  • wombat said on Jul 30, 2008....
    Not hokey at all.....very precise sentiment and emotion, and I am sorry to hear you are hurting.
     
    As for writing poetry, when the mood hits me it just flows out sometimes, and other times not.  I usually go with the rhyming thing, and fill in the blanks with lines that fit. 
     
    Hope you will feel better soon, and whatever you are going through will be resolved soon.....
  • killingme4u said on Jul 30, 2008....
    secret.i like it also.hell it's much better than i could ever do.it'll come to ya.and i love you too--thank's for your comment's.but where the hell you been??????i miss you.    :)))))))))
  • secretlife said on Jul 30, 2008....
    ginger:  the feelings are there, just the words seem to be blocked this past couple of weeks.....
     
    wombat:  i had this post in draft for the past 10 days trying each night to see if something might "happen".  LOL...obviously not, huh?
     
    killie girl:  i've been on "vacation" this week and not near my laptop much.  but i'm still around reading posts and commenting when i can.  you know i'm always here for you sweetie pie!
  • woman said on Jul 30, 2008....
    Secret~Do you have a secret love? Your poem, which I loved, certainly sounded like it.
  • Mamie said on Jul 30, 2008....
    love it! That's how we roll...real...unedited...I think it sounds quite right!
  • Jenna said on Jul 30, 2008....
    secret.....the poem you wanted to write.....well you wrote it.  The message was heard, felt and completely understood.....I am sure. xo
  • PAPERBACKWRITER said on Jul 30, 2008....

    ME LIKEY!!! :)))

    I will have to say for the second time this week (I think, lol... insomnia confuses me :D), amen to Mamie... (to paraphrase)...that is how we should roll (or in this case, how we should unrhyme XD ) in SC u n e d i t e d!

    I will classify it as a radical rebel of a romantic poem...yaaaaaaaaaay!

    You go momma :D

    (((((((((huggies)))))))

    joanna


  • gingersoul said on Jul 30, 2008....
    Hey Joanna....waving my hand here....hello.....{{hugs}]
  • wombat said on Jul 30, 2008....
    Some things just take time....all good things come to those who wait.....I wish you all the best!
  • beyondtheveil said on Jul 30, 2008....
    secret- Gee, wish I could write like you say you can't. But if the words aren't what you're after, maybe you're anxious. I can't do much of anything when I'm anxious. 
  • PAPERBACKWRITER said on Jul 30, 2008....

    GingerMeGinger [giggling]!!!

    I am doing me rounds bellissimma...am off to your corner :))))))))))))))

    muaaaaaaaahhhhh

    <3333333333333
    j


  • paidinblood said on Jul 30, 2008....
    lol

    I love the comic relief--and the honesty of thoughts and feelings is one that I definitely appreciate.
  • quietone said on Jul 30, 2008....
    well I think you were quite "wordy" here.  :)  good to see ya secret, words or no words.
  • satyr said on Jul 30, 2008....
    smiling at you, SL ... I know the feeling
  • queenparanoia said on Jul 31, 2008....
    i have nothing to blog too... i ran out of words... ;-)
  • Me-Myself&I said on Jul 31, 2008....

    Howdy Secret! i'm wordless too. so, i'll just say....i love the Anti-Poem and i hope with all my heart all is well with you and yours!

    I'm just getting and going these days. very soon i can exhale. *smile*

    Take care my friend. ~see ya

  • RollingC said on Jul 31, 2008....
    You're good Secret...even if it's unusual, it still has character and a message that is clear.   A very unique poem.......
    I like it.    :^)   
    Rc
  • MissMimi said on Jul 31, 2008....
    It's right from your heart.  That's what really counts.  I can relate to your anti-poem.
  • evil_twin said on Jul 31, 2008....
    I thought your poem was good :-) Poetry is an expression of your feelings, and this one really laid it all out there. Missing someone you care about is difficult. I hope he comes back soon so your world will feel more complete again.

    -evil_twin LA
  • GrapeKoolaid said on Jul 31, 2008....
    Confounded words... 

    It has a way of getting in our way sometimes, no?  It's just a clunky tool when it comes to describing the subtle nuances of the heart, when you're trying to express your true feelings. 

    I understand this poem all too well, secret, for I've felt this way on many occasions. 

    Well writ.  Now who's the one with a poet's heart?  ;)
  • zaneamorphous said on Aug 06, 2008....
    the way you want to say what you want to say will come out when it wants to, dont force it =]

    i love what you've written already!

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