• brit said on Jul 04, 2008....

  lovely poem asian fire monkey ;-) ciao!

• moonriver said on Jul 04, 2008....

  whoa... is it just me? or have you reinvented yourself into the emoticon girl? university in the fall, huh? best of luck from this fire monkey, and thanks for the early fly-by... :-)
  
  

• queenparanoia said on Jul 04, 2008....

  you wish it was her... but t could never be her...

  let her go moon...

  in your heart that is... time to move on...

  youve been suffering from this love for a long time... am i right?

  oh well love is really tricky...

  (ohmygosh! i can't believe i'm so serious!)

   

• Lucytorial said on Jul 04, 2008....

  Moon I am not in an emotional state to cope with this one yet... maybe a few months from now I will be okay and comment... good lord... stop it now before you make me cry!

• moonriver said on Jul 04, 2008....

  queenie -- (turns a childish tantrum, like one whose candy is being taken away...) but i don' wanna let go! no no no i d'wanna!
  
  (turns serious...) ok. if you say so, my friend. i'm letting her go this very minute. you're right. time to move on. i've been moping around the block for too long now. gotta put my priorities back on track. gotta move on. move move move!
  
  lol.
  
  

• Lucytorial said on Jul 04, 2008....

  Sometimes moon staying put to understand what it is we really want is also a good thing... sometimes its safer to just to be a bit.. rather than react, change for changes sake is never good... in the long run..  I truly hope that you find her.. really I do.. you deserve it.

• moonriver said on Jul 04, 2008....

  lucy -- I understand, my friend. If only I can easily shift moods to make you laugh instead...  But hey, there's no harm in trying, right? Maybe you should re-read my banana series. Or, how about re-posting your pirate-eye pic? Lol. That's a good one... :-)
  
  (Turns serious again) I'm sending good thoughts your way, my friend, and truly hope that you can get over the situation that's been pulling you down of late...
  
  And don't worry about me. I will find her. If not on the bus, maybe on the train, or on the plane, or on a sailing ship... :-)
  
  
  

• Me-Myself&I said on Jul 04, 2008....

  that was wonderful. you are such a passion person. hey.... if i saw you on a bus well.... i'd give you a big hug and a wet kiss! ;~o  lol....

  moon, i do hope all is fine and dandy. take care of yourself my friend.

  ~see ya

• fearing said on Jul 04, 2008....

  That was good Moon!  You're going to have me all weepy now.  

• the_infernal_optimist said on Jul 04, 2008....

  And again I find that even sad and wistful things are beautiful when they unfurl such word-sails as you weave for them, my friend.
  
  ((hugs))
  
  ~Infernal
  

• wishyouwerehere said on Jul 04, 2008....

  Let go of the self-rebuke, Moon, and cling to the beauty of those dreams long enough to vow to create a new reality, one that rivals the things of the past - WYWH

• moonriver said on Jul 04, 2008....

  memyself -- And if I saw you on the bus, I'd give you a hug and a kiss too. But wait! How would I recognize you, when I don't even know how you look? (...unless you send me a pic. *hint hint* lol.) Things might not be fine right now, but -- to paraphrase George Carlin -- they are dandy. Take care of you too, my friend.
  
  fearing -- Thanks for the kind words. Sorry, I didn't mean to make you cry... although the situation that impelled me to write the poem was indeed something felt deep in the gut.
  
  infernal -- I'll tell you a secret. The event described in the poem really happened around the first week of June. I was so moved by it, I had composed the key phrases in my mind before I got off the bus. But I couldn't finish it despite my free time helping take care of my mother in the hospital. Now that she's gone, and with the sense of loss slowly sinking in, I was surprised when the words just poured out once I sat down to finish the poem. I rewrote and completed it in about two hours earlier today.
  
  I like the image of "word-sail..." Thank you for being always here, my friend.
  
  wishyou -- Thanks for the kind words. You are right. I did mention self-rebuke, because it was exactly how I felt at that moment. But yes, such a moment creates its own validity. And you are right again, I've been vowing (a hundred times already, it seems) to build a new reality out of a beautiful dream. Now if only it wasn't so exhausting to do the endless ground-work masonry and carpentry...lol.
  
  

• gingersoul said on Jul 04, 2008....

  
  Moon.........for you ........and for your mamma......
  

• skald said on Jul 04, 2008....

  Good to see you. The poem is beautiful. 

• everythingyouthink said on Jul 04, 2008....

  I just happened upon this poem.  It's beautiful.  Thanks for sharing.

• Alyss said on Jul 04, 2008....

  Moon, another beautiful post. I've been the person day dreaming on the bus too and recognise that moment of loss when I realised  it was not who I had hoped it to be.

• Imalovernotawriter said on Jul 04, 2008....

  I knew a girl too -  

  a girl on the bus - 

  still see her gorgeous face,

  beckoning me to sit,

  but I pass her by,

  too shy...

  40 yearning years

  age me 

  and still I mourn her

  and the boy

  too shy

  to simply sit

  and say hi

• RollingC said on Jul 04, 2008....

  Very expressive Moon.... I like it.  You should write more love poems.  ;^)
  Rc

• moonriver said on Jul 04, 2008....

  ginger -- Thank you, my friend. If you noticed, I added a Youtube clip to the poem, Le Cygne by Camille Saint-Saëns. I think it imparts the right mood. The only sound lacking to make the scene complete is the hum of the bus. Lol. Actually, Andre Rieu is a family favorite, and Tanja Derwahl on cello is simply awesome. This is for you, and I know your daughter and your mamma will like it too.
  
  skald -- Ah, the mastermind behind the Iceland threesome... :-) I feel ok now. Thank you for the nice words, my friend.
  
  everythingyouthink -- Thank you. I've been reading your blogs too, lately.
  
  

• moonriver said on Jul 04, 2008....

  alyss -- I'm glad the poem made a connection with your own feelings. When you miss someone so much, the most routine daily things somehow touch your memory banks and remind you of them -- a certain laugh, a certain phrase, a certain song, a certain ring tone... and yes, someone's face you see while riding the bus. But that girl's likeness was so startling, I had to restrain myself from actually hugging her, or getting off the bus to stalk her. Lol.
  
  lover-writer -- Man, that's a good poem you have there. Thanks for dropping by, and I hope to be reading your blogs too.
  
  rc -- Sometimes my poetic muse visits me in the unlikeliest hours and places. I was more prolific last year, I think. Hopefully, this year, I can draw out more poetic inspiration from the Beijing Olympics and the US elections. Lol. Thanks for the nice words, dude.
  
  

• Lucytorial said on Jul 04, 2008....

  I think she'll find you! can't miss a fire monkey like you moon! trying to laugh, very hard.... its not working yet ~ {:/

• hotaka said on Jul 04, 2008....

  The lyrics are beautiful. Too bad I can't hear the song. Oh, wait. You wrote that?!!! Holy poetics, Batman! That is really amazing. I knew you were good but that poem is something else. It could be a song, you know.

• moonriver said on Jul 04, 2008....

  lucy -- My friend, you've got to make it gradual. First, a smile. Then a silly grin. Then a hearty laugh. Then a demonic cackle. (Ooops, erase that last one.) For now, I'd like to draw out a smile from you. Come on, girl, just an itty bitty smile...? Lol.
  
  hotman -- The instrumental music is Le Cygne by Saint-Saens. It has no connection with the poem, except in my mind. Lol. Thanks for the nice words, my friend.
  
  Could be a song? Hmm, yeah, now that I think about it, it could do well with country-style music and a catchy title, like, maybe, "I tried to hug her on the bus but all I got was a slap on the face." Haha.
  
  
  

• serious said on Jul 04, 2008....

  This was so lovely, thanks for sharing with all of us. would like to meet someone like you some day.

• moonriver said on Jul 05, 2008....

  hi kathy, thank you too for your kind words. i've started reading your blogs, and hope you share more of your experiences.
  
  

• quietone said on Jul 05, 2008....

  awe moon you big sappy guy!  I loved sappy guys!  you will live on, and things will go on...... and one day the wheels one the bus will go round and round! 

• BrightSpot said on Jul 05, 2008....

  beautiful!

• BlueHotRage said on Jul 05, 2008....

  Love the poem, Moon.  And I'm not much of a "poetry" person, so that's saying something.

  I'd snap my fingers, but I don't want to accidentally set off anymore fireworks.

• moonriver said on Jul 05, 2008....

  quietone -- sappy adj. -pier, -piest. Full of sap; juicy; succulent.
  
  I'm a big sappy guy, huh? I like that word sappy, and I'm gonna ignore the other mawkish connotations that follow the above definition. Lol. Anyway, my friend, I agree with your wheels-goin-round-and-round analogy. The pessimist in me says I'm writhing in pain under the wheels, while the optimist in me says I'm in control behind the wheel. Oh please, my friend, tell me it's "behind the wheel" and not "under the wheels"! Lol.
  
  brightspot -- Hi there. Thanks for dropping by. I read your first blogs, they seem interesting. I'm subscribing to you right after this.
   
  

• moonriver said on Jul 05, 2008....

  bluehot -- Hey, friend, how you been? Thanks for the nice comment. You can snap your fingers anytime in my blog. I love accidental fireworks. Lol.
  
  Btw, I read through your latest anti-CN diatribe. You're snappy and sharp as usual... sorry if I had some mental block and couldn't comment on the spot. I'm going back there now...
  
  
  

• quietone said on Jul 06, 2008....

  moon ~ I know and have faith you would never throw yourself under the bus.. you are definately IN the drivers seat!  :)  plus I mean sappy as a soul filled with emotion.. like a tree full of sap, when tapped it weeps/runs.

• moonriver said on Jul 06, 2008....

  quietone -- Yes! Me taking the wheel in the driver's seat! I can just imagine tomorrow's headlines now: "Sappy soul hijacks bus to kiss girl." Lol. Silly thought of the day, but who knows what magic simmers in the cauldrons of fate?
  
  

• quietone said on Jul 06, 2008....

  moon ~ sounds like a great start to a wonderful movie!  and, yes, one never knows what lies around the next bend!  :)

• cotterall&elaineadams said on Jul 07, 2008....

  sounds like some stuckup upper class WASP chick that would never be fine by 'hood standards.

• CreativeWoman said on Jul 07, 2008....

  You write such hauntingly beautiful poetry, moon. 
  
  CW
  

• phie said on Jul 08, 2008....

  this is so beautiful, its like your feelings are right there as plain as colours.
  wow officially have no breath in my body
   
  phie

• moonriver said on Jul 08, 2008....

  quiet -- Thanks again for the nice words, my friend :-)
  
  cotteral and elaine -- Yeah, yeah... I can see what you're trying to say. I imagine a 'hood chick who'd play catch-my-eye and rub-a-dub with me from Harlem-148th all the way to Central Park north, and when she gets off, she wants me to get off with her. On a park bench behind the bushes, right? I bet you have some real-life stories up your sleeve too along that line. Post 'em, and I'm sure a few people here will read 'em. Lol.
  
  cw -- I'm glad you liked it, my friend. I guess I was lucky my Poetic Muse could fit me into her tight sked last weekend. Most of the time it's difficult to catch her... :-) Thanks for dropping by.
  
  phie -- Thanks for the nice words. I've started reading your blogs too. I particularly liked those ones on enlightenment and rubbish boys... :-)
  
  
  

• silverwhisper said on Jul 09, 2008....

  ah moon, such longing...may you see her again soon in a place where you can be as you wish.
  
  ed

• aviatorx said on Jul 09, 2008....

  the first few lines of this are really powerful
  
  this was amazing, thank you
  

• moonriver said on Jul 10, 2008....

  ed -- i will see her again, my friend. i'm sure of that. and when i do, i've half a mind to hijack the bus and bring both of us to the... beijing olympics. lol. but seriously now, i have big plans ahead of me, and there's always this special space reserved for her in 'em. if i can find her. and if she's still interested... :-)
  
  aviatorx -- thanks for peeking in and leaving some nice words for me. i peeked at your blogs. your poetry is intriguing.
  
  
  

• monkeyboyx said on Jul 10, 2008....

  That was fantastic!
  
  
  
  
  P.s. I'm a monkey too!
  

• moonriver said on Jul 10, 2008....

  monkeyboyx -- hi fellow simian. thanks for brachiating so gleefullee into my poetree. lol.
  
  

• monkeyboyx said on Jul 11, 2008....

  GREAT POST MOON

  If i could post like this I could stop selling bananas for a living! You make me want to try harder! Bananas are good,but this is better!

• blueskye said on Jul 11, 2008....

  This is so beautiful!
  I hope one day it is her!

• moonriver said on Jul 11, 2008....

  monkeyboy -- thanks again, simian dude. oh, i'm sure you can write awesome blogs too, so long as you draw 'em out straight from the heart and spend lots of time re-writing them. and don't ever throw away anything, just keep them in draft mode.
  
  for starters, since you are selling bananas for a living, why don't you write about selling bananas? no, seriously, i mean it.
  
  and hey, psst, you sound uncannily like lucky13. stefano, is that you? :-)
  
  blueskye -- if i really meet her on the bus, i'll probably club her senseless, lift her clear off the floor, heft her across my shoulders, and run away with her for good. sometimes i can't control my caveman urges. i'll let you know when it happens... lol. thanks for dropping by.
  
  

• jazzyjake said on Jul 13, 2008....

  good poem;  reminded me of someone in my life.

• lostboy said on Jul 16, 2008....

  I really like this poem. So sad, I've had this experience in the past too.

• moonriver said on Jul 17, 2008....

  jazzy jake -- I'm glad, and I hope the recollection brought a smile to your day. Why don't you blog about that someone for us to read? Thanks for dropping by.
  
  lostboy -- I'm happy that you liked the poem. Yes, it's sad in a sweet way, but the last stanza also expresses that kind of furious, desperate hope that will not be denied. Who knows, really? It might come true yet. Why don't you blog about your own experience for us to read? Thanks for dropping by.
  
  

• eurekame said on Jul 20, 2008....

  Moonriver, this poem resonates deep within my soul, and touches me to my core…relatably so I feel these same feelings.

• moonriver said on Jul 20, 2008....

  Hi Eureka, I'm very glad you felt a deep resonance in you. Thank you for dropping by, and welcome to SC.
  
  

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